Sunday, August 19, 2012

#SixSentenceSunday - Week 10

Happy #SixSentenceSunday!

This week I spent most of my time going through my WIP and revising it to remove any instances of passive voice so I didn't get a whole lot more written. I wanted to catch the passive voice before I got much farther into the manuscript. So, this week's six sentences follows pretty closely to what my previous six were.

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From Guardians:

The sun glinted across her car, and on the shattered remnants of her driver’s side window that littered the ground. Horrified, Alana ran over to her car, careful of all the broken class. At first glance, nothing else seemed damaged, just the window but Alana was afraid to disturb anything until the cops were there. Broken glass was everywhere, what wasn’t on the ground was all over the driver’s seat and the floor of the car.
It was unusual that there was even any glass on the ground at all. If someone tried breaking in the car, most of the glass should be on the inside, not outside. 

Thank you for reading!

4 comments:

  1. Great suspense going here, and interesting question for a hook! Nice six!

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  2. Great job using the description to set the tone. It's a lovely bit of writing. Nice job!

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